I
remember it all clearly, what I was wearing, and who I saw, and what my last
words were. The day I died. I was walking from the orphanage to the park I had
music blaring in one of my ears. The other ear bud was hanging by my side. I
trotted along the road, people walked around me ignoring me, just the way I
like it.
“HEY
HOMELESS!” a wicked little voice yelled from across the street, Tristan. He did
a little cocky saunter over to my spot on the street. I turned around, trying
to ignore him.
“How’s
life on the lonely side? Hey could you get me “Annie’s” phone number? I like
girls that sing.” This went on forever I jammed the other ear bud into my ear
and walked faster toward the orphanage again tuning out everything. I turned
the corner and rushed to the cross walk. I then felt a sharp tug on my left
shoulder, it was the relentless Tristan, and I hadn’t even noticed him
following me. I turned around and shoved him way , then ran across the street
timing it perfectly so that the light turned green and Tristan was cut off by
what seemed like hundreds of cars speeding by.
But
as I turned around to make sure he wasn’t following I was just in time to see
the big truck barreling toward me. Then suddenly the world froze. The car was
almost on me I straightened up and looked around, some people haven’t noticed
but other people like Tristan were watching and had a horrified look on their
frozen face. Tristan was about to run into the street. I stumbled up and look
around. I saw that I left a shimmering outline of my death position. I ran to
the edge of the street but a clear invisible wall restrained me from running I
pushed and pushed until a hole formed in the wall showing a room full of doors.
Suddenly knew what this room was where I say good bye to the people
who loved me I stepped into the room and watched the hole melt away, leaving me
in the room alone. I waited and waited until one door creaked open. A short
plump woman walked in. I towered over her but I could see the resemblances
between us, my real mom. The one I was taken away from when I was young. She
brushed the stray hairs out of my face and placed a soft kiss on my cheek. I
could see the damage the alcohol has done to her as she limped away. I held
tears behind my eyes but the next person was too much. Tristan ran over to me and
embraced me in his strong arms I cried for what seemed like forever. I sank to
the ground and he rocked me as we both cried. I just wish he would actually
remember this moment. Next thing I knew I was alone Tristan was gone and I was
in a room full of screens showing years of my life. But this wasn’t necessary I
had a bad childhood the first time I didn’t need to watch again.
I
shoved open a small door and looked through. I saw the world still frozen and
my spot still shimmering ready to take me away. Suddenly I ran toward it past
everything leaving it all behind. I fit myself into the spot and then the world
unfroze, I felt a blinding pain I yelled for Tristan and in so little time I
was able to see his face as a man caught him from running for me. Then I died.
Terrific Story, Harriet! Sad, but wonderful.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the "shimmering outline" of her death position and your idea about the room full of doors where she says goodbye to people who loved her.
I hope you post more.
Love,
Aunt Rowan
Thank you sooooooooooo much
DeleteWOW!! Every time I read this I am mesmerized - I love the way the story moves along, the point of view and your description of Tristan. This is a rich story - as it stands on its own but also suggests a much larger and grander story. Thanks for sharing!!!
ReplyDeleteHello Harriet!
ReplyDeleteI love the imjagery and scene setting you have done. I also think you have gotten into this girl's head and presented it very well. Am looking forward to more stories from you!
Keep it up!
Dale
Harriet, what a beautifully written story! Your descriptions are so vivid. Keep on wrinting.
ReplyDeleteLove, papa
SO dramatic and mysterious...great images of passion and emotion. keep going girl!
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